…this:
While fascination, holding me aloft,
Contrived to make all people witness this
One miracle, its secrets introduce.
Causes “Zemanta” to produce the following tags:
Twitter, Havas, Raytheon, Great Commet, Starwood Hotels and Resorts Worldwide, Hotel, Steve Jobs, Barack Obama
Will wonders never cease?
…likes. The fact is, sometimes we just click “like.” It does not actually mean we ‘like.’ It does not mean we actually have read. Still, it does mean something. We do this. We perform this action for each other–fellow bloggers. We do this, in part, because we hope that our blogger friends–as well, we hope that we–through the long chain of bloggers connected to other bloggers, will be connected with those who will appreciate their special brand of comment or insight.
Regardless of our art or position or our views on anything in particular, we seem to care for one another in our quest to be heard by those who would appreciate our work, or comments, or views. At least at this low level of notice, none of us seem to be concerned with whether or not we understand or relate to a message. We seem all to be friends regardless. On this day, which is a day of thanks in the United States, it seems appropriate.
Hmm… well…. quick post now working again. It must have been an errant Java update.
…I took an in-depth look at major and minor wordpress technicals, widget redesign and selection, and other new and improved ™ items. As well, did I flirt briefly with a couple of “paid” features, the use of which I will not allow myself without setting some goal or other.
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Once again, this same message. I feel compelled to caution people against “peer” review. Perhaps I should not worry.
Now… just because you encourage “crit”, or perhaps anything else that with it might so rhyme, does not mean I must! However, in just this one case, I believe I will also “take the risk:” I must here state that–although it may well be true that “nobody is perfect”–I find your original to be far superior to the altered version suggested. And for two reasons which I will explain below.
Although Robert Browning suggested that it was the virtue of poetry to be obscure, and obfuscatory–and I am paraphrasing here, as is my wont in using grey matter rather than Google–it should be remembered that he was, in fact, joking when he made this assertion.
By this, I suggest that making ones meaning unascertainable is not an improvement, even if it improves, for example, the overall sound of a piece–which the suggested revision, also does not accomplish in any significant way.
I might have seen some reason in the suggestion perhaps of the removal of the indefinite article in the first line; however such would put the piece out of balance with the fourth line.
Also, the suggested revision does not trip as lightly off the tongue when read aloud, and, as well, causes the line breaks to become irrelevant, as a replacement for breath, punctuation, etc, and as an aid to reading–as well as mentation.
Also, as I’m fond of pointing out: Be careful what you encourage. If you are an aspiring writer, this logically implies that your peers have questionable credentials. (as well as intentions and motivations,though they may be genuine, the nature of which there are no ready means whereby you may easily ascertain these)
Qualified critics, include successful writers–successful in all ways–otherwise they engage in mere speculation, and–by virtue of the fact that they do write, and therefore, do read with an eye to writing–their view of what they read is necessarily, and predictably, skewed (and, I include myself in this category, as well)
But even more important–much much much more important–are readers who do not write, have no hidden aspirations to write, but just enjoy reading what one has written. Only they can give reliably unskewed information regarding what is clear (to them) or not, or what is beautiful (to them) or not; and, unless you intend your audience to be among aspiring writers alone, this is very, very important information.
You have, I feel, an enviable gift with words, Take great care, lest you allow it to be watered down, diluted by those whose intentions, and abilities, and in fact, identities, you cannot know.
via The slow pull of a whisper’s fade … « Flights of a Magical Bird.
…a male perspective, of course–although It might be quite instructive to attempt to write about it from a female perspective, as well as male sensuality therefrom–is more difficult emotionally for me than male. Male sensuality I may view as an art form, however my emotions are so wrapped up in my love it is most difficult for me to do so for the female.
This is why I believe I shall only write one of the sensuality series every other day or so. While it is not structurally or metaphorically difficult for me–any more so than any other worthy topic, it does take its toll emotionally. I think a growing boy like me needs his rest! So therefore look to my coming at first light on the fifth day. At dawn, look to the East, and all that. Hopefully these will be more frequent than every five days.
Yes, this is what I indeed decided to do. There is too much here to sort out, the whole post is wonderful with all of its comments included just as they are.
I have a long day–a long road–ahead of me tomorrow. Wish me luck!
David Emeron: Sonnets 